Monday, October 13, 2008

Poll


Okay, so, what do you think of this for the plot of my story:

Ideas
Their father has to leave for the War and finally comes back at the end of the book


Their mother gets pregnant with twins and at the end they're finally born, or they are premees and they are very worried, but they grow bigger and healthier at the end

They finish building an addition to their house


Which one do you think is best? You can tell me in the comment box, or if you have any other ideas, let me know. Thanks!!!!

More Of Chapter One

After breakfast, Sarah went into the living room and started to play with their puppy; But Evelyn went outside again and rode on one of her favorite horses through their lovely apple orchard. Rosie wanted to go outside again too, so she dropped what she was doing and ran outside following Evelyn. “I wanna come too” Rosie said. “Oh alright” Evelyn said back. Evelyn took her horse out of the stable carefully and helped her little sister and herself onto Moonlight, which is the name of her horse. They rode through the orchard, Rosie laughed with excitement, and she loved riding with her sister who she looked up to so much. Their puppy in the house was named Sparky it was a very cute puppy. Sarah had got the puppy for her birthday, when she was just turning nine years old. Their puppy was a beautiful tan color. Mama was washing the dishes inside, and called Evelyn in to help her clean the kitchen. Sarah always had the job of sweeping the floor, so she did that, and cleared the table. Evelyn and Rosie came inside fast. “Oh she is just so cute!” exclaimed Rosie.

“Yeah really cute” said Sarah. “Come here doggy” said Rosie. “I will feed you your breakfast. The girls just finished cleaning the kitchen. “Thank you for helping me girls” Mama said. “Come on, let’s go play tag outside”

Exclaimed Evelyn. “Okay” said Sarah. So they went outside to play. The grass was still wet from the dew, and apple the blossom tree was so pretty with the sun shining on it. They loved to play outside in the mornings when the sun was just rising. A little while later Samuel and Isaac came to play too. They played until they were tired out and came inside. The girls went up to their room, crafted, and did their hair, which they loved to do. Evelyn did Sarah’s and Rosie’s hair in French braids. Evelyn just had hers in a pony tail because Sarah could not do hair that well. Then Mama read a book to Rosie, her favorite one. The boys played a game of checkers. The two girls went outside again, after reading their books a bit, and visited the chickens. Sarah tried to pick one up, but the chicken just kept on flapping her wings and running along the chicken coop. But finally Evelyn caught her in her arms tightly. “Good girly!” Evelyn exclaimed. “I’ll try to hold another one.” said Sarah. And she went to get her very own calm chicken named Goldie, very pretty and easy to pick up. She found her laying an egg. “She laid an egg!” Sarah said excitedly. “Wow, bring it in to Mama!” exclaimed Evelyn. So Sarah did, and Mama put it in the fridge, with the other eggs. “Thank you honey” Mama said. “You’re welcome” Sarah said, and went right back outside. “Let’s play a game now!” exclaimed Evelyn. Ok Let’s go get Rosie” Said Sarah, and Evelyn went inside and got Rosie. They played a game of capture the flag. And the boys played too. “Ah man you win!” exclaimed the girls after they played the game.


Sunday, October 12, 2008

Endings and Beginings

How do you start and end your stories? With a happy beginning but bittersweet ending? Or with a sad beginning and a happy ending? Or maybe you do a happy beginning and a happy ending?

Usually I do a sad beginning, and finish it off with a happy ending. I always find ending so hard to do! I find it's hard to end a story you've been working on for ages and ages. I drive everyone crazy by taking forever to finally end them!

The Davis Family

Chapter One: Summer Family life

The Davis Family lived in a pretty, beige, white trimmed house in New Hampshire on a farm. They had apple orchards and sunflowers. They had cows, beatiful, strong horses, fluffy feathered chickens and they shared a whole flock of sheep with their cousins.
Evelyn, their oldest, thirteen years old, ran through the soft wet grass, and knelt down next to a berry bush, and picked some blueberries.
After a little while, her two yoinger sisters came outside. Their names were Sarah and Rosie. Rosie was three, and Sarah was ten. They saw their Papa and brothers working very hard in the barn. Their brothers in the barn were eleven and twelve, and their names were Samuel and Isaac. They were very strong and hard working like their Papa.
Mama was inside making breakfast. She had cheeks like roses, and curly black hair.

The other little ones were still asleep; and their names and ages were: Jack aged eight, Joey aged one, and Charlotte aged four and a half onths. Mama just then heard Charlotte whaling from upstairs; she quickly stopped making breakfast and went upstairs. As she got Charlotte out of her crib, she saw the the others awake, and told them to come downstairs. Then Mama went with Charlotte in her arms, and finsished breakfast. She called everyone to eat, while putting berries, crea, orange juice, and oatmeal on the table.

Saturday, October 11, 2008

I Need Advice!

I'm not posting a story just yet, but I need advice on writing one.

I wrote a ton about a family with nine kids living in New Hampshire on a farm. I'm so happy with all the characters and everything, but I haven't worked out a plot. What plot would be exciting for a family setting? Do any of you guys have ideas? If so, please say what they are in the comment box. This would really help me.

Thanks so much!!!!!!!!!

Friday, October 10, 2008

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